Your essay overall is pretty good.
You just need more description and add a paragraph or two on ethos because that
is missing from your paper. For your title, you need to add one that reflects
what you are going to be writing about. Your ideas in all of your paragraphs
are very good and evaluate the success of the three appeals, but in order to
persuade the reader, you need to add more evidence and explanation on why it
was successful. Your intro paragraph is pretty good. I think you should add a
paragraph before that giving a summary of the article that you are writing your
essay on so the reader kind of gets the gist of what the article is about and
what you are talking about. Your thesis is very clear and it states how all of
the rhetorical strategies were successful.
In all of your paragraphs you have a
very clear topic sentence, then a quote with an explanation of how it
persuades. To make your paper stronger you should add more detail to your quote
expanding more on how the author is successful with the specific rhetorical
style you are writing about in that paragraph.
Your essay identifies specific
examples of logical appeals used in the source text. The paragraph on logos
does not include any quotes though which I think you should add. All of the
information that you provide in the paragraph is sufficient and you use point
out very good points that fit into the logos category. The example that you use
of when Hitchens was being water boarded is a good example and makes your argument
successful. I believe that readers will be persuaded by these appeals,
especially if you add a little bit more explanation and detail to persuade the
reader.
Your paragraph on appeals to pathos
is very good. You give a quote that strongly fits in with appeal to pathos but
you need to elaborate more and explain why the use of it was successful in the
article. It is a good start though; it just needs a little bit more added to it
to support your thesis.
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